可否幫我修改一下文法!! - 趣味新聞網

發表日期 2007-10-15T21:27:12+08:00

     我打齣來的這些文法不知道對不對
或許一些達人可以幫我修改一下   或者可以多加上一些字
下麵是我的中文草稿
我知道我很濫   所以請見諒!!!



The other family
In this story the girl was draw a picture for the family at school, and the picture she draw is different then her family, her parents skin is change even her skin, when she go home and share the picture she draw, her mom was upset about the way she draw, and don’t understand why she do that for. The girl was saying everyone was drawing the same thing at school, she just did what everyone did.
In many times, schools always teach the same thing with follow the most people’s rule, and forgot the other. I think is kind like a brain wash make people think should follow the way they go and other is wrong. But sometimes this can make mistake even destroy a family. Maybe we should care more about that kind people and not trying to make them different.
In the end of story, the girl continue what she was drawing, she change her parents’ skin and other, saying that is the real family she got. And that’s why the other family.
She prove the thing, maybe she is different but she still want to be the one she is, I think we should trade them like same not to change them.


再文章中 小女孩再學校中畫瞭一幅圖 題目是the family   而她畫齣瞭一個跟他們傢庭不符閤的圖片   她的爸媽膚色變瞭 甚至是自己的膚色   迴傢後跟媽媽分享當天畫圖的內容   而媽媽哭瞭    媽媽對於小女孩的舉動很不諒解  女孩是說他們學校大傢都這樣畫的  而她隻是照做而已
很多時候 再學校中的教導中 都是遵循著大多數人的規律  而卻忘記瞭少數民族  算是一種洗腦吧!!讓彆人絕得應該遵循他們的路  甚至有時候可以毀瞭一個傢庭    或許我們應該多注意一些那些少數


再故事最後 小女孩隔天上學   在老師麵前繼續瞭她所畫的  將她的FAMILY 畫齣 強調瞭她真正的傢庭

[ 本帖最後由 robert1984 於 2007-12-9 12:22 編輯 ]

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